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Monday, November 5, 2018

te kauru camp 2018- writing 2nd draft

Butterflies fluttering in my stomach,engine started here we go!Down and up breathing hard to hard i'm running out of breath ahhh we dropped, faster and faster dropped again it feels like i'm going to pee,oh no were upside down flipping and flipping i see whaea deb on the invader. I heard wicked screaming ahh it hurts my ears please stop ,phew were done wait noo! were going again but this time it wasnt so bad. Enjoy the ride finally we finished on the rollercoaster i'm dizzy i think i'm going to fall luckily i didn't. Time for family karts yay! i'm the height to drive wop wop manniah-jae if want you can come with me? ’’kyla i really don't trust her’’ you can go with rhaven? when i hopped in the kart i looked around me and seen all my friends and my mum, the rules are No bumping into each other,No over taking if you don't follow the rules they will tell you get out and he said remember only two rides around the course enjoy.As i was driving by myself my kart stopped and so they fixed it. My mum said i'm a better driver than my dad,And we all giggled that was so amazing because we haven't been since 8 years.
oh no here we go
here i go im coming after you.
ok i was wrong i love going on the rollercoaster

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6 comments:

  1. UnknownNovember 6, 2018 at 1:22 PM

    Hi Brylee ,nice work this was the best quality sentence I have ever read in your blogger. The story was so funny . You did it Brylee you made me LAUGH!:);)

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  2. UnknownNovember 6, 2018 at 1:22 PM

    hi brylee i was a chicken i didnt go on the roller coaster. im glad i didnt go on it because your experience sounds frightening. i wanted to drive the family karts but i was to small. how did they fix your kart by the way?

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    1. UnknownNovember 7, 2018 at 1:46 PM

      they fixed my kart by telling me not to panic and they pressed a button and it made my kart go

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  3. UnknownNovember 15, 2018 at 1:22 PM

    wow was it scary i didn't go on the rollercoaster

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  4. UnknownNovember 15, 2018 at 1:27 PM

    i hated the rollercoaster but went on it 8 times

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  5. AnonymousNovember 15, 2018 at 1:30 PM

    Hey brylee i loved the roller coaster as well i went on there a couple of times with Mrs davan and Stevie what was your favorite ride ???

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